my goal

Writing is a difficult subject to me. My TOEFL writing score is the lowest compared to other sections. The biggest reason is that I do not have any chances to convey my ideas with letters except English class. Furthermore, writing is not really my interest and I have some bad memories. Memories of writing class of first semester is horrible since my essay editting job was done always at midnight, pressed for time, nervous. I do not want a repertoire of the first semester. As I know my deficiency, I could improve a lot. It would be a difficult process but once I overcome my deficiency, the subject will be much easier and interesting.

The primary thing teachers commented about my essay was that I should develop more. I could not understand about "developing". I used quite good examples and made some points about the topic. However, in KMLA, by reading some famous stories and well-organized essays, I could realize my deficiency. My sentences had some ideas, but it only ended to an idea. My essays were choppy, it was a list of ideas that didn't link together. Also, the ideas weren't specific, neither the examples. I used broad sentences that conveys diverse meanings which hindered the fluency of the essay. These are all the things I want to eliminate by taking composition class.