2012년 9월 21일 금요일

MONTHLY TOEFL ESSAY#1




     Table manner is the first step of a person’s brain development and education. When mothers meet their eyes with their infants, infants communicate with and learn about their mothers. A toddler trains to behave and get etiquette lessons during his meal with elders. A table is a place where child and parents share kinship and converse about their recent lives. Every country has distinct table cultures and the daily usage of table emphasizes the importance. Especially, Korean tables are distinct because Koreans use a tool called chopsticks. This custom, using chopsticks during meal is really a merit to Koreans. Majority of researches prove that chopstick using facilitates development of brain. Also, chopstick allows many Korean families to spend longer time during their meals. Other countries would also benefit when adopting this custom.

To begin with, chopstick using table manners promote development of brain. Utilizing chopstick requires thirty parts of body joints and over sixty parts of body muscles. Especially, when used for picking up small things, the activity stimulates nervous system reaches the zenith.   For foreigners, chopstick for every day diet, would enable them to enhance their usage of brain and concentration. Some critics assert that the success of Korea’s supreme semiconductor technology is contributed by the custom of using chopsticks. Semiconductor technology requires delicate touch and meticulous observation. Since Korean mechanics are from environment which consumes many parts of muscles, used to deal with small objects and have good concentration, korea takes advantage of rapid development of semiconductor. This example is the representative one that shows the superiority of traditional custom, chopsticks. Other countries might also benefit by utilizing chopsticks and exercising their brain activities. Cutting edge including IT, medical treatment, usually needs delicate touch so other country or foreign people can benefit.

Furthermore, the table manner using chopsticks ensure families to spend enough time bonding together. Unlike forks or other utilities, chopsticks can pick up only a limited amount of food. With chopsticks, people slowly reach the food for many times. In comparison to forks, which can pick up chunk of food, chopstick using is more time consuming relatively. As a result, people could enjoy more time with their family by using chopsticks. In majority of countries, many social problems such as murder, violence, divorce emerged by the deficiency of understanding and affection with family members. Private time with family is crucial these days since kinship with family members helps people to grow upright. People communicate about recent hardships they are facing or their daily schedules with family during meal. People release their burden or stress when they are with family members and can endure their stressful daily lives. Chopsticks allow people to spend adequate amount of time with their family and share affection and understanding with each other when they are in the table. Chopstick using helps families to enjoy adequate time releasing their stress and feeling the love between each member.

To sum up, one of the traditional table custom, chopstick using is helpful for foreign people. Adjusting the custom to their country or their lifestyle would really benefit because of the merits of chopstick using. It is very educational, since it encourages the usage of brain. It improves concentration and muscle controlling of a person. Furthermore, it enables people to have enough conversation with their family members. Chopstick takes relatively longer time for finishing the meal, and people spend the time with affection and care with their family during the meal. 

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  2. +)The way she made reference to both individual AND social influences that chopsticks could bring about was quite interesting.
    -)It seems that there has been a minor jump of logic in the third paragraph; would the use of chopsticks actually elongate mealtime? If so, would elongated mealtimes play a crucial role in diminishing social problems such as murder, violence, divorce?

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  3. I liked the phrases which had high quality and I think that it fit in well to the overall essay. Since my essay topic is similar, while reading the essay, I empathized with the content of the essay. Personally, I consider the essay as a great one. If I have to find only one problem in the essay, I think that the conclusion's thesis statement is quite long. It would have been much better if the last thesis statement was more concise.

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  4. Your essay about chopstick is very interesting. I really like your first body paragraph. It is very well organized with appropriate examples. On the other hand, your second body paragraph is not easily understood. I cannot understand the relationship between longer mealtime and feeling attachment to families. Also, as Jaehee mentioned, I think today's social issues and longer mealtime do not have connection. If you add some explanation to this paragraph, your essay will be great! I like your topic because it is unique!

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